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Title: And I'm Dreaming With My Eyes Wide Open
Fandom: TVXQ
Pairing: Homin
Rating: G
Words: 1891
A/N: A little something written in the midst of a block? One more instance of several months old idea suddenly coming alive with sudden inspiration.
Betaed by [livejournal.com profile] isaofdoom - thank you ♥ And also - the extra mushiness is all your fault/all for you, pick whichever.



Jung Yunho first appears on a winter afternoon. His dreams are rough, his smile beaming and carefree, and Changmin detests him from the get-go. A no name, that’s what he is. A no name wannabe dreamer that happened to find himself in the wrong place, wrong time. A raw talent, his superintendent exclaims with enthusiasm as he introduces them to each other. Changmin doesn’t snort because he’s not that crude but the hand he extends to Jung Yunho is cold and professional and his grip just a bit too loose to be considered firm and friendly.

The man gets assigned a working place next to him, a space that stayed unoccupied for so long simply for there were no dreamers skilled and apt enough to be offered it. Many yearned for it - middle-aged co-workers already present in the company when Changmin joined at the tender age of nineteen - and longer still. Back then Changmin had been fresh out of academy that he enrolled into two years earlier and graduated with honours.

They get connected to neighbouring visualising machines, sedated and put into the state of artificial slumber where dreams are born, but their minds still function as though they are awake. When Changmin finishes after two hours – the dreamscape he swiftly created detailed, effective and beautiful and just the right amount of impeccable - Yunho’s still at it, not even half finished. Changmin sneers at the estimated time of completion and then he glances at the personal screen broadcasting Yunho’s creating process and his breath hitches.

It’s wild, it’s uncontained, it’s thousands of colours. It’s too many things happening simultaneously, and unpolished. It’s the most breathtaking dreamscape Changmin’s ever seen in his whole career.

He is still watching on as the world splays in front of his eyes when he feels his supervisor’s hand land on his shoulder and give it a light squeeze. His gaze flickers up to the man’s delighted face and to the proud smile that is blossoming on it, encouraging Changmin to reciprocate – he’s far from returning the gesture.

Together they wait for Yunho to wake up and when he does, it’s with much exaggerated exhaustion unbecoming of a professional that Yunho’s not. As the team disconnects him from the machine, he gives them a tired quirk of his lips and then his eyes lock with Changmin’s – and he can’t, he can’t look away – and he whispers with mirthful disbelief and some kind of soft-edged reverence, “this is so amazing.” Changmin lets out a breath of his own that he wasn’t even aware he was holding in.


Soon Yunho becomes a sensation at the company – the sheer talent he possesses makes people float to him with their admiring gazes and their skills forever lacking. Changmin scorns them, remembering when it was him that they gathered around. He tries to convince himself that he’s not jealous, but at the same time, that jealousy is sufficient enough of a reason to hate Yunho. Even so, he can’t bring himself to do either.

After Yunho gets trained to control his dreamscapes more, so they’re not as overwhelming with their intensity, he and Changmin often get assigned to work together. Yunho’s still not disciplined – still not safe enough to create dreamscapes for clients in real time so instead they cooperate on not personalized spaces, Changmin’s effectiveness, taste and control a perfect counterpart to Yunho’s carefree richness and unrestrained ways.


Changmin learns a lot about Yunho in this manner and while he treats him the same way as he does everyone else – politely but maintaining a healthy, proper distance – Yunho insists on otherwise. He finds Changmin during breaks, coaxes him to go the cafeteria together, tries sharing his bought lunches with Changmin when they’re still in the working space, barely disconnected. He produces them from his bag and Changmin scolds him because it’s forbidden but somehow he never tattles.

It’s because I’m not this kind of a person, because I don’t need to fight dirty, he tries to convince himself but with each passing week it sounds less certain, less truthful and he may be falling, possibly, but he will never admit to it. Not to himself, not to Yunho.

Finally, the big day comes for Yunho when at last he can prove himself in an attempt at a real time creation in full cooperation with an actual client. He’s ready, there’s no doubt about it. Changmin witnessed his tremendous progress himself, saw to it and he believes in Yunho’s skills.

Yunho is ready and things go terribly wrong.

The client’s mind is a little unstable and Yunho’s prepared to deal with this kind of issues – to stabilise the other person’s mind before they start factual syncing, to proceed slowly, begin with small doses of colours, general space first, bigger objects later and finally unobtrusive details, one at a time. He’s prepared and he hesitates, he glitches, makes a small mistake which he quickly tries to get rid of, to fix and it’s too quick, too sudden and then things go down one after another, the dreamscape crumbling, falling apart, collapsing on itself with the client – with Yunho – still inside.

The rescue team is fast and efficient and they go about disconnecting the machines swiftly and safely and no one gets hurt. The client – young, pretty lady with one of the most outstanding lawyers of the city for a husband – sues Yunho and the company and they lose.
Human error, they say, no excuse, they hear in return. Yunho gets demoted, not fired because these things happen and they’re not that rare but they happen in less prominent companies, they happen to rookies that Yunho shouldn’t have been anymore.


Things change, in many aspects. Yunho’s no longer perceived as a prodigy and it finds its harsh reflection in his surroundings. Several of their co-workers drop the act, half-glad, half-relieved at Yunho’s failure. They gossip about his situation and its possible ramifications, their voices half a volume too loud to count as whispers although they do disguise them as such, even as they cut off their conversations in a dramatic manner when Yunho enters the cafeteria or the workroom. Most people stay pleasant though, won over by Yunho’s friendly and helpful nature. He worms his way into their hearts and becomes a cause of their honest worry about his well-being and his future in the company.

Things calm down and get settled and Yunho receives a second chance but he’s not doing well, not at all. It is disappointment in himself but mostly fear and anxiety about harming someone that burden him and he tries to keep up with his ordinary bubbly and cheerful exterior, he does, but it’s not working too successfully and his once brilliant smile is cracked at the corners, flickering, unconvincing.
Changmin takes it upon himself to return the previous Yunho back – or at least the pieces that are still salvageable. He has no clue why he’s doing it, except that he does but even after all that happened – his own emotional turmoil that he went through when Yunho was in the biggest trouble and the fierce need to comfort and protect – he’s not yet prepared to face himself.

He does his best to face Yunho though, belatedly trying to reciprocate all the sweet, thoughtful gestures Yunho directed at him before, trying to coax out at least one honest lift of the corners of his lips. His innate shyness and awkwardness make his attempts very hit-or-miss at times but he succeeds every now and then and each instance of Yunho’s somewhat shaky but truthful joy nevertheless is compensation enough for all the internal cringing and embarrassment at his own ineptness.
Like that one memorable dinner break that Changmin plans out for them, promising Yunho a week in advance that he is going to make them a true meal, so the other man for once won’t have to buy premade subpar dishes. He spends a whole evening preparing a dish he particularly prides himself on, all that for a short moment of silence followed by a fierce blush when, after leading Yunho to his favourite secluded spot, he discovers that he forgot to pack the whole thing. But Yunho just bursts out into laughter, loud and unrestrained and honest. Then, after he’s calmed down he ruffles Changmin’s hair lightly and Changmin bats his hand away, bashful.

It’s a long, sometimes tedious, sometimes frustrating process but slowly, Yunho recovers. His dreamscape loses the grey hues and the omnipresent hesitance it gained after the accident, becomes more vibrant and bright and steady once again. They train together a lot, once again joining their forces to create spaces filled with colours, details, once soft-, once hard-edged but always captivating and imaginative. Yunho cooperates with many different workers at the company, each time bringing something fresh and new to their perspective until he is at last assigned another client.


Yunho finds Changmin an hour before the job and the man’s so serene that for a moment Changmin berates himself for being so silly and worrying enough for the two of them but then Yunho reaches out and takes his hand, placing it on his own chest. As Changmin feels the hammering heartbeat, he lets out a small laugh and he knows that Yunho’s got it. Yunho catches his gaze and he holds it and then, with Changmin’s hand still resting over the source of the man’s pulse, he says quietly and calmly, “thank you,” before he lets go.

The session stretches into two excruciating hours that feel more like ten as Changmin waits outside the dreamscape room.

It ends as a success, a great one at that. As Yunho exits the room, Changmin wants to join him and congratulate but the other man gets ushered into an enthusiastic pile of their co-workers that shared his plans and Changmin’s never been the one to elbow his way into anywhere, so he just steps aside and watches Yunho get patted and hugged and cherished. Yunho manages to capture his eyes for a split-second and the already wide smile that’s adorning his face broadens even further and Changmin grins back, his eyes crinkling and his heart filled with inexplicable joy.

He’s ready to leave for home when Yunho finds him again. The man’s anything but serene this time, brimming with ill-concealed energy, his eyes bright with just a hint of unshed tears. When he once again takes a hold of Changmin’s hand, Changmin’s not sure what he expects – maybe a replay of the previous scenario - but this time his hand lands lightly on the side of the other man’s face and then, “thank you. Thank you for everything.” Yunho closes the distance and leans into his space, into him and tilts his head and oh.

The kiss is short and chaste, Yunho not taking anything more than he thinks he’s allowed to so it’s Changmin’s turn now and he lifts his other hand to cup the man’s face properly and locks their lips together and there’s nothing chaste about it but it stays slow, languid and unhurried.

Changmin’s bad with words and he’s more than a bit in denial about many things but he can recognise a promise when he sees one. And this, this is a promise of more time to come.




Comments and criticism as always much appreciated ♥

Date: 2012-09-16 05:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] chrisrenheb.livejournal.com
I really enjoyed this.
The flow was smooth and steady.
It's just a beautiful story.
Nice job.

Date: 2012-09-18 07:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Thank you very much for reading and commenting! I'm really glad you enjoyed this piece ♥

Date: 2012-09-16 06:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] natipooh.livejournal.com
Not so sure about the plot. It's a bit... pointless.

You need to work on a better summary.

Date: 2012-09-16 06:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] bbyah.livejournal.com
ahhhhh your characterization is spot on!
And I love this premise. Very special and self-contained. amazing job!

Edit: ...pointless? But it's...a plotline. I don't get that at all. It doesn't seem pointless to me? Premise -> Conflict - >Climax -> Resolution are all here :(?
Edited Date: 2012-09-16 06:22 pm (UTC)

Date: 2012-09-19 12:38 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Thanks for taking the time to read and comment! I'm really glad you liked this fic!

And while I'm capable of telling apart proper criticism from baseless jabs, I really appreciate your reassurance ♥ It was really sweet of you :>



(Ugh, sorry if you get this more than once - LJ's misbehaving :|)

Date: 2012-09-16 07:15 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] glitterburn.livejournal.com
This is beautiful, and in a quiet and understated way that I often associate with your fics; understated yet not passive, because there's a lot of active imagery and emotion going on. Changmin's POV is perfect here because he's the embodiment of the story - calm, unruffled, controlled - and then along comes Yunho to stir things up and Changmin's emotions start to shift, echoing the difference in their abilities to create dreams and in the way they interact with one another and with the people around them.

I loved your Yunho. I can imagine his dreamscapes, all bright and warm, and I can imagine Changmin's, too - tailored, in a way, but with that almost clinical edge of 'this is my job and I can do it well', and what he lacks is joy - for Changmin it's a job, not a vocation, and Yunho's exuberance is so startling that Changmin's defensive reaction is completely understandable. That for Yunho this is a gift and not something learned in school is evident in the way he crashes and burns with his first client - his reaction at 'hurting' someone is tangible, and with it his fall from grace.

What I really liked is how you have a number of themes coming together in a very concise way - the most striking one, for me, is 'pride comes before a fall' - superficially that's Yunho rushing at something and then screwing up, but for all the praise and attention he's received as the newest wunderkind, Yunho isn't prideful. Changmin is the prideful one, and he's the one who falls - for Yunho, *because* Yunho falls. And while they both change because of one another, Changmin is the one who changes most.

And in less than 2k? Brilliant.

Date: 2012-09-24 08:58 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Sorry for such a late reply /o\ And - thank you so much for such a thoughtful and lovely review, it really means a lot ♥

I'm really thrilled you liked this, honestly. ♥ And your words about this not feeling passive is a great relief. That's one of my concerns when writing - does this really work without dialogues? Doesn't it seem flat? Isn't it too weird with characters not really speaking out in actual lines? So thank you for dissipating it a bit regarding this piece. (Tho I guess I still should try writing dialogues more. I have too many comfort zones in writing that I'm very reluctant so step out of and I know I won't improve much if I keep on avoiding certain things.)

That for Yunho this is a gift and not something learned in school is evident in the way he crashes and burns with his first client - his reaction at 'hurting' someone is tangible, and with it his fall from grace

Ohhh, I haven't thought of it this way? I just read [livejournal.com profile] dentedsky's fic today & in a reply to you, she said how your comment actually made her realise something about her own writing. I guess this is a similar thing since what you say, fits? :> Tbh, when I started writing, I only knew that I want Changmin's careful, tailored and peaceful life and career get disrupted by Yunho's appearance. The way the whole plot proceeded after that, pretty much decided on its own accord. XD As it usually does, erm.

And I really like playing with the contrasts in Homin's personalities~ (Tho I think they actually are really similar in some ways? Either way you can't get bored with them.)

And yes, it's Changmin all the way. For Yunho it was more of an exciting, wonderful challenge. That is, until he realised how big ramifications his work can have.


Thank you once again ♥

Date: 2012-09-16 07:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] olgap-k.livejournal.com
This was pretty, so dreamy and I don't know, kind of magic, and you managed to portray Changmin's growth so good.
Beautiful story, really.
I loved it.

Date: 2012-09-20 04:23 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Thank you so much for reading and for your kind words~ ♥

Date: 2012-09-16 11:56 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yunhominji94.livejournal.com
Oh wow I have to say this is really good. I like the story and I agree it had a nice beautiful slow flow to it. I think the PLOT was very nice and actually seemed similar to me in something (a game) I had played a while ago. I love how Min was just the calm more steady quiet one and stayed more to the side while everyone would praise Yunho constantly with his skills and the whole prodigy act that I think that's why it was harder for him especially when he failed. But that just shows he's only human and not perfect and by seeing that I think that's why Min fell in love with him. Really <3 the story. ^.^

Date: 2012-09-20 06:31 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Awwww, thank you! I'm really glad you enjoyed the story :')

Min was actually falling for Yunho even before that but I think this accident forced him to finally realise (and admit to himself) that Yunho's become a very important existence in his life? It was also a period when Yunho needed him in a rather obvious manner, so Changmin had to confront himself and his feelings towards Yunho. (Or at least, he couldn't deny and ignore them so easily anymore.)

And yes, I guess the constant praises and all the hopes places and expectations placed upon him would make the failure even harder? Since he felt like on top of everything that happened, he was also letting everyone down.

(And I must admit I wonder what game it was~)

Date: 2012-09-20 11:09 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yunhominji94.livejournal.com
Yes that's exactly what I thought. And lol well the game was To The Moon. It's a really interesting game. Cute yet sad and there is a sequel coming out. But because of the type of jobs Yunho and Changmin do it kind of reminded me of the main character's jobs. The ones you play as. Check it out and correct me if I'm wrong. Hehehehe. Oh and can I add you as a friend? XD I like making more HoMin buddy friends and I've read your past works and I really like them. >\\>

Date: 2012-09-23 12:26 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Ahahaha, I'm not a gamer tho~ Was just curious :>

Re friending - did you mean on this account? Or my writing LJ? I wouldn't mind but I'm afraid I rarely update the former (and when I do, it's mostly RL) and on the latter I really do post only my fics. But if you want to~

And thanks, I'm really glad you did <3

Date: 2012-09-23 12:43 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] yunhominji94.livejournal.com
Lol oh ok just wanted you to know. And uh I guess this account? ^.^;;; lol either way love your writing can't wait for more.
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Date: 2012-09-20 06:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Zeeeeeeee~~~~ ...khem. Thank you, really ♥ I'm overjoyed you liked it~ (And that comment about the dreaminess of this piece is particularly interesting cause I didn't really perceive it as such yet I've got told that by several people, hmm~)

Date: 2012-09-17 02:04 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xxfergiexx.livejournal.com
I absolutely LOVE this dream concept!! omg seriously, the writing and the flow of it was brilliant! :o

You captured their personalities perfectly in my opinion too with their dreamscapes:

When Changmin finishes after two hours – the dreamscape he swiftly created detailed, effective and beautiful and just the right amount of impeccable

--> this is so Changmin. No nonsense, perfect, orderly.

...then he glances at the personal screen broadcasting Yunho’s creating process and his breath hitches.

It’s wild, it’s uncontained, it’s thousands of colours. It’s too many things happening simultaneously, and unpolished. It’s the most breathtaking dreamscape Changmin’s ever seen in his whole career.


--> this is Yunho, wild Yunho! ^.^ and Changmin can't tear his eyes away...kind of like in real life.

Also, the fluff at the end when Yunho grabs Changmin's hand to put it over his chest and then the sweet kiss at the end -- so touching/precious!

Great story! Wonderful plot! (this is shimjunglove btw) ^o^

Date: 2012-09-20 05:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Awwwww, thank you for the kind words ♥ I'm really glad you enjoyed the story~

and Changmin can't tear his eyes away...kind of like in real life.

hahaha, yes!

Also, it's a relief that you liked the ending cause I was anxious if it fitted, mood-wise.

(And I knew :3)

Date: 2012-09-17 06:58 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] buzbean.livejournal.com
i love the story very much
short but able to capture the many aspects of homin's character and relationship
thanks

Date: 2012-09-20 05:47 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Thanks for reading and commenting! ♥

Date: 2012-09-17 08:01 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] almond86.livejournal.com
Oh my..I totally did not expect this when I clicked on the link..

That was an absolute joy to read..your characterization was spot on! Yunho with his raw talent intense, wild and uncontained while staying ever so humble..Changmin who is a perfectionist and is excellent at what he does and prides himself in it but is lacking in the x factor not because he doesn’t possess it, far from it but because of his uptight character and always going by the book..

A perfect fit together as Changmin tames and nurtures Yunho’s intensity into smthg that could be utilized and Yunho inspires Changmin to take the leap while he sticks by his side...

In a few words you managed to go through character development so seamlessly it seems almost effortless..you stayed true to both characters all the way as they evolved… one needing the other to bring out the best in himself without even knowing it..which goes both ways..dunno if I got my point through o_0

Absolutely loved it (^_^)

Date: 2012-09-20 07:00 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
*_____* This comment is so, so lovely ;; Thank you, really ♥

I'm truly glad to hear that you think I managed to reflect their personalities in their dreamscapes - I especially like your comment about the x factor in Changmin's case cause yes, that's it.

I really like exploring this fascinating codependency that exists between Homin ans how they seem to compliment each other so well so it's great that you liked this aspect.

Date: 2012-09-17 06:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] haeym.livejournal.com
hehheh, assbutt!changmin.

idk if you said something about this being inception-ish at twitter but it gave me the vibe? i liked the fact that you didn't dig into this dream business too much so i imagined it to be something like in that movie. and for some reason i kept imagining yunho being younger than changmin but it was probably just me. 'D yunho was jjang, nicely in character as well as changmin but i think your yunho was just pretty superb. /un-crooked thumbs up

well, if you want some criticism - this might be just me but - some of your sentences are really long. it's not necessarily a bad thing but i makes reading really heavy from time to time. not sure though if i have noticed similarities with your other fics but this one made me notice few rather long sentences. '~~~'

Date: 2012-09-20 06:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
He's not an assbut, he's shy and conflicted. :< And a jerk.

it wasn't me but [livejournal.com profile] glitterburn who said that. And you know that already but no, I didn't see the movie. So I guess it's kind of interesting that people might've perceived it as similar? But it also makes my job easier, I suppose, since like you said - you could set this fic in pre-existing frames~

And actually I was wondering about it too? I couldn't decide if he was younger or older but assumed most people would go with the latter, simply because that's the factual situation. So I guess you can pick whichever~ :3 I kind of thought he just might be younger, tho \o/
And I'm really glad you fond Yunho IC? My fics are usual from Changmin's POV and I'm often afraid that I'm not doing Yunho justice, so it's great to hear ♥

Ahahaha, I know that /o\ Isa scolded me about this several times already. Tbh, sometimes I think so too on the re-read but when I'm writing, I don't notice that at all and I'm crap at rewriting and editing such stuff ;; But I'll try to be more careful about that~ If I somehow curbed in the tendencies to fill my writing with brackets, then surely this too ought to be achieveable! ...Basically the length of the sentences and my still omnipresent hyphens are next on the agenda.

Date: 2012-09-18 05:42 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gigglemayhem.livejournal.com
This was beautiful! I wish I could hire a Yunho/Changmin dreamscape... my dreams are so boring and bland otherwise.

Beautifully written! A pleasure to read.

Date: 2012-09-20 05:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Lol, tbh I wish I could use their services too since I can never remember my dreams and if I do, they're not very fascinating or what I'd like my subconciousness to project.

Thanks for your nice words ♥ I'm really happy you enjoyed this piece!

Date: 2012-09-18 02:03 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] isaofdoom.livejournal.com
HELLO is there anything i've not said about this, honestly, we have a few thousand words with of comments DON'T WE. D:<

as it turns out, i still love this ; ~ ;♥

Date: 2012-09-20 06:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
It'd be much crappier without you so thank youuuu ♥

(Lol. "Wait, did he want it or not" "He kind of did" "It's complicated to be Changmin :'(")


I'm glad you like it ♥

Date: 2012-09-18 06:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] kat-diva.livejournal.com
I'm terrible at comments so I rarely leave them. I can never express how pleased and satisfied I feel when I read something very well written, that paints us a picture and leaves us richer because of it. Thank you for writing this, sharing it, and letting me enrich my own thoughts and imagination because of it. I enjoyed it, because it's subtle, and it covered a topic I'm not at all familiar with, yet I felt at home reading it because the characterization is spot on! So original!

Date: 2012-09-20 06:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
I'd say you're doing mighty fine with that whole commenting deal? :> Hahaha, I totally get you, tho.

Thank you for reading and taking the time to comment, especially if it doesn't come easily to you. Your words are too kind, really ♥

Date: 2012-09-19 07:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] light-on-oceans.livejournal.com
OMG NINJA INCEPTION!AU I LOVE YOU SO MUCH
this was beautiful though - i really liked how their dreamscapes reflect their personalities and the sheer beauty of their contrast :)

mem'ming~

Date: 2012-09-19 07:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Ahahaha, I haven't seen Inception though XD And I'm not sure what it's about either, except that it's dreams related *^*

But I'm glad you enjoyed it! And having it mem'd is an honour~ Thanks for the comment :>

Date: 2012-09-19 07:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] light-on-oceans.livejournal.com
woah, you really haven't seen Inception? O_O props to you then for coming up with something just as beautiful (but soooo much less confusing, hahaha)

i did enjoy it~ my pleasure~

Date: 2012-09-19 09:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] sohii.livejournal.com
I know I usually go about this commenting business by quoting the whole fic but this time I won't. this was an entity, something that worked brilliantly as a complete story. no particular sentence stood out (and I don't mean that as a bad thing, not in the slightest) but they all blended together, they all had the same feel, an easiness, to them. if I'd have to choose one, it would be the very first one. it somehow tints the entire fic, a white blue calm that's disturbed by yunho's perfect imperfection, a too green blade of grass against the snow.

I have a huge weak spot for silent kinds of fics like this. I didn't mind the lack of dialogue, not when in turn you so vividly use simple story telling to describe their interaction. it leaves the little details up to your own imagination but you're not left on thin air because you've created just the right atmosphere around it.

I love how you've reflected their personalities into the dreams they create, changmin's all neat and perfect but maybe a bit lacking emotionally whereas yunho's are just wild and bright and messy all over the place but no less perfect. and how they together balance each other off (I think we talked about this the first time we talked on twitter?)

and ah seems like hemi beat me to the punch with this one but at first some of the sentences felt a bit too long? that might have something to do with the time of day I tend to read fics but occasionally I had to backtrack the sentence to remember where it began. on the second read though it was easier, when you knew how the sentence would unfold but during the first time, some felt a bit exhausting.

your au ideas are always so lovely and imaginative. I didn't even think of inception before reading some of the comments but I don't see it, other than the dreams theme.

this has been a comment and yeah lets just say I'm tired and stressed and now listening to bsb so yeah, gonna go with this now. but I loved it, I really did, just my kind of fic. (shh don't tell that to anyone though, or the multi-chaptered ones will get jealous and run away.)

Date: 2012-09-23 12:49 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Ahaha, I don't know actually :> But this is very, very flattering in a way ♥ And it's a relief too that you liked the first sentence? Since it seemed kinda blah for me as far as first sentences and their attention-capturing function go.
(It's also amusing that apparently the trance-like state I wrote this in got reflected in the overall feel/cohesiveness XD)

And perfect imperfection, yessss. That's like my most basic image of Yunho in general. (But I won't gush here since I think I do enough of that on twitter/tumblr 8D)

And this comment yet again is very reassuring since I often doubt how my fics even work, without dialogue and as odd as they somehow end up.

For me that particular equilibrium is one of these very characteristic features of Homin's relationship and I love it, so I'm glad you thought it was noticeable here :> (And I think so, yes. As far as first convos go, that was a good one, dare I say 8D)

And as I already said in my reply to Hemi - yes, I'm aware of that. /o\ Isa mentions to me each time I give her something to beta but I don't notice it when I'm writing (as my writing process is a bit of... "oh hey, look at this hand, it lives, how creepy") and then I find it hard to rewrite/edit. Even if sometimes I get the same impression on reread, I'm just alergic to editing, idk. But I'll try to be more conscious of it in the future~ Thanks for telling me that :>

And you get ♥♥♥ for this since well, ♥. Thank you, really. This was such a lovely comment ;; How do you do that, Sohii ;;


(And let me just say I totally put on BSB's Everybody for when I was replying to this. 8D Also, I'm totally telling next time any multi-chaptered fic talks to me *^*)

Date: 2012-09-25 03:50 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cheeky-lollipop.livejournal.com
wow... very good... i love the idea... although i dont really understand what Min and Yunho's job is but i got the gist of it and it's really interesting...!!! you are very creative.!
thanks for sharing..! :D
Edited Date: 2012-09-25 03:59 pm (UTC)

Date: 2012-09-28 08:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Thank you for reading and commenting!

And tbh, I kind of wanted the exact spectrum of their job to be left up to the reader and their interpretation? :>

Glad you enjoyed this!
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Date: 2012-09-28 08:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] thier-sess.livejournal.com
Thank you a lot for the comment! ♥ Even more so if putting it all into words didn't come easily to you - I really appreciate it. Also, I'm glad you enjoyed both the plot and the characterisation and I'm very flattered that you mem'd this! :>

Date: 2012-11-20 07:54 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] changmin-amour.livejournal.com
read this before and i guess i forgot to leave a comment, otl.
re-reading this, so here i am now :D
i really loved this. your AU worlds are always so amazing they just.. really capture me as a reader, and i'm always so disappointed when i get to the end :(
i think my favourite part about this fic was how it's so colourful yet so quiet at the same time <3
thank you for sharing~~

Date: 2012-11-22 07:59 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] je-sessho.livejournal.com
I'm really delighted to know that you feel this way about my AUs ;; I love writing them~ (...or at least I love coming up with them because the writing part varies.)

Thank you for this lovely comment! ♥

Date: 2013-05-16 06:53 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] xuewentoh.livejournal.com
oTL most people said what I feel about this, so. I'll just add that this puts to mind arthouse films where there're less than ten lines of dialogue in the whole film but they get utilised skillfully because when the characters do speak to each other, it's BAM, short and sweet and powerful to the heart and it tells the reader a lot more than what is actually said on screen.

Date: 2013-07-08 10:06 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] je-sessho.livejournal.com
I'm the worst at dialogues so I'm always eleated when people confuse my ineptitude for being skillful. I mean. Thanks a lot ♥

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